Thoughts?


_JJ_

New Member
Thoughts on my project..
Some context requests 6799
Outdoors
Dog training
Positive reinforcement
Icon relatable


Best,
-J
 

hankscorpio

Moderator
Staff member
Overall - concept is good and easy to understand.

Smaller details will be lost at smaller sizes, like the roughness of the font at business card size (the holes in the font) - the tree details etc.

Not sure why there's a triangle - but here's a line for you - it represnts the dog, the owner and the trainer in a partnertship to train the dogs (damn I'm good!)


The "A" in Bark encroaches on the lettering underneath - again in smaller sizes it will look awful - and very difficult to embroider etc.


Overall - lose the triangle and the small trees - why not have a large outline of a tree instead (you get your triangle and trees in one).

And ditch the grunge font for a more solid font for easier application across different mediums, and space out the text so there's room to breath.

I'd also make the last line as long as the "Out of the Bark" and scale it up to the same width.
 

_JJ_

New Member
Overall - concept is good and easy to understand.

Smaller details will be lost at smaller sizes, like the roughness of the font at business card size (the holes in the font) - the tree details etc.

Not sure why there's a triangle - but here's a line for you - it represnts the dog, the owner and the trainer in a partnertship to train the dogs (damn I'm good!)


The "A" in Bark encroaches on the lettering underneath - again in smaller sizes it will look awful - and very difficult to embroider etc.


Overall - lose the triangle and the small trees - why not have a large outline of a tree instead (you get your triangle and trees in one).

And ditch the grunge font for a more solid font for easier application across different mediums, and space out the text so there's room to breath.

I'd also make the last line as long as the "Out of the Bark" and scale it up to the same width.
Awesome suggestions thank you for them
 

Levi

Moderator
Staff member
Biggest issue, it doesn't look like a dog to me... shape is wrong, it looks more like a deer.
 

Wardy

Well-Known Member
Same here, not very dog-like, looks like it has horns. I'm presuming it's just a preliminary drawing. I don't think it looks very friendly overall,
triangle signs usually depict danger. And the text is far too small compared to the mark above it.
 

_JJ_

New Member
Thanks all! ,yes it’s a preliminary sketch did it in about 30 minutes last night just to get the juices flowing. I’ve added some of your suggestions requests and I totally agree on pushing a little more of a dog look on the head. I’ve rounded a bit on the ears and added a nose instead of a line we do want the head to be graphic. As for the text client is stuck on the text I’ve already tried cleaner fonts for future planning purposes but client does not want to budge… Final concept will have finished fine edges. I appreciate everyone’s thoughts6800
 

DanSilva

Member
It's better but still doesn't look like a dog to me. I think you use too many straight lines, you need more curves(more organic). The nose seems a little bit weird. It's like is not connected with the rest of the design. Also, I don't know what reference did you use, but it seems to me that you draw the inside of the ears in the wrong direction(usually the internal ear(the hole) is facing the outside of the shape for a stereo hearing). Hope that you understand what I mean,
 
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