ACBC looks confusing - it looks like NC3C.
Some of the mockups are awful - don't look real at all.
Hyphenations in the text look terrible - didn't read it all but caught my eye.
Roma - again hyphenations in text look awful
Why did you do a bad copy of a famous statute?
Adds doubt to your credibility.
Do you think people are going to seriously read your indications?
Do you know that Roma FC has the same image of the wolf?
Your whole recreation of La Giovane Roma completely ignores everything of the history.
How is the letter 'O' a reference to Romulus and Ramos????
You identified issues with scalability but did nothing to fix this issue.
It's a bit like people trying to find a solution to a new egg carton.
Why?
Egg cartons work fine, trying to find a solution to a problem that doesn't exist.
The whole Roma thing is nonsense - why hex colours? Where's the pantone references for print? Especially large format - where it will likely be ProPhoto RGB and not limited sRGB colours.
I can't wrap my head around what this is
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Awful kerning
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The O over the O means nothing -without your vague reasoning in the hand drawn sketch I wouldn't know why these are focal points.
No sense to this.
What's in the letter 'o' here - that was never used before. Confusing - why did you do that?
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About it???? Why those words?
Hyphens in the text - not needed.
Bold wording is not visual enough.
Logo grid - an afterthought to the design.
Nonsense.
A rose for a hairstylist? Why?
Florist makes sense.
Words in a circle - hard to read.
Scaled inconsisently.
That font is going to cause you major headaches in production at small sizes. I mean like business cards - badges etc.
The font won't work.
Parsons
Logo is good.
Text is awful.
Your English is terrible. Consider a copywriter.
Another logo grid - an afterthought again.
Drop it.
Times - really???
Colours - again - no Pantone references - all sRGB and not workable.
Your black is 4 colour - no printer wants to deal with that.
That font has issues in reverse at small sizes. Reconsider.
Too many mockups and some look terrible.
The 3D sign on the glass looks awful.
The logo is too large on the t-shirt.
On first glance the work looks good.
But I barely scratched the surface and only glanced over.
Truly - if this came to me I'd have dismissed it rather quickly into a 'maybe' pile.
Usually - I get hundreds of applicants.
90% are not considered.
9% are put into a maybe pile.
1% are first callers.
You need to work your way into the 1%.
Is it good work - yes in parts. But I am finding imperfections that are easy fixes.
That Roma thing - it's not good. It borders on good and nonsense.
It needs to be beefed out a lot more.
The reasoning for the 'o' is catastrophic. That alone might make me put you in the 90% and not the 9%.
It needs work to get to that 1%.
And that 1% puts you in a call list of about 10 people.
You then need to be the 1 from that group.