I think it's a great start, but I agree with everyone else that the connecting lines are a bit OTT. Maybe try Turing your lines into solid shapes, make them semi transparent like glass or a motion blur - could even colour code them to the dots they join up.
I like MJ96's comment on staking the type like the original, but maybe try different locations in relation to the icon to mix it up from theirs.
All in all I like it though. You can see a strong connection with the original, but it's different enough to know that it relates to something different. :thumb: