I didn't find it too bad for what it is. Overall design wise, I'm comfortable with the direction and feel. Like the grids, like the typography. A lot of the things mentioned are subjective and small and will not make a dramatic improvement and I prefer not to get involved in art direction at this stage. Where it can improve and build on is the starting point and idea.
As a concept to try and get a job then it should work a lot harder in the overall design strategy and thought process. Rather than produce a website, produce a website that will try and get you a job.
Therefore the design proposition is '
Hire me' - not showcase your work : this is two different strategies and executions. Therefore content, personality, information and self-promotion is the key.
This to me could be better and effectively executed in a simple Wordpress format rather than a website that is half done or lacks that killer punch.
As everyone knows I always say KISS keep it simple - don't overcomplicate the issue or let Design get in front of Communication. Don't overstretch your self trying to do things you only half achieve. Play safe and simple.
A blog style site will do all the things you need to showcase your work, thoughts, ideas and progress. Look at
David Airey, graphic designer to see how simply and effectively he communicates.
Too often, young designers try to project themselves be experienced hands or big companies. Be you.
People buy People. Sell yourself to the potential employer or client who may visit your site. A website is just a form of communication.
As I said - I don't dislike your graphic attempts, but I question the effectiveness of your strategy.
The aim of this form of communication is to get hired. Consider your target audience and how to communicate effectively with them.
Paul Arden said 'Never be precious to ideas - throw them away and a better one will appear.
The starting point is the key to all succesfull communication. Have a beer and a think.... Good luck