Squiddy said:
I love the idea of the card, however, my main issues are that firstly, the font you've chosen looks like it's been cut out with a pair of scissors. Think newspaper Photoshop jobs - not good! The R, N and W all look rather mangled to me.
You're right. The font was originally a grungy one(as shown on the first page of this thread(I think)) Which I decided did not represent my style of work and was no need or reasoning behind it, so I pen tooled around it to get what you see. However this was quite a rushed process so I need to re-do that. I didn't want the letters to be uniform but instead more 'moving around' to try and represent someone talking/crowing about my work.
Squiddy said:
Secondly, as inspired as I am with the uniqueness of the card, when I get to the contact page it all seems a little... lacklustre. Other than the shape, there are very few designer elements to this business card of a person who specialises in graphic design.
For the back I just wanted to show contrast from the front, but again, I think you may be right, however I am not sure what to do to show that I am a designer. Any ideas?
Squiddy said:
Lastly, I think the font size is too small for the contact details and some (older) people may struggle to read it.
I will see what it looks like up a point size or two. Because the cards are slightly bigger than standard business cards the font is somewhat lost(I went for 6 or 7pt, the business cards I have researched seem to be around 6pt)
Squiddy said:
As for your mailer idea, well it may be because I'm very tired, but I really don't understand your proposal. You send out stickers (door to door style?) to people who then put these stickers on newspaper articles/magazines they find interesting. Presumably articles/magazines they have already bought and are sitting at home? Why would they do this? If something like that came through my door I'd more than certainly put it in the recycling bin.
I'm not being overly critical, I'm just trying to highlight potential questions that I think should be addressed before you go ahead with a project that could potentially waste your time and resources. As I said, I may not have understood correctly so please feel free to correct me.
I forgot the main point(my bad). The newspaper will be a designed portfolio to show my work. The paper could be called 'The Designer' for example, and the main story 'Aspiring Designer Seeks Work Placement' which will then have a little information about myself and my style of working. Then inside would be a selected few pieces of work representing each area of design I specialise in. The sticker idea may or may not work, the concept is that the businesses I send them to(inside the newspaper) would use them to mark my work if they like it, something for them to refer back to. I hope this has cleared things up.
This is the kind of criticism which is highly useful so don't be afraid of giving it. Praise will not get me anywhere so I thank you for the help.
yellowdog said:
I personally love the look and idea of the card, I would perhaps but more emphasis on the 'Crowe' and definitely increase the font size on the back. One thing I would say though (having shown my girlfriend your card) is that without any idea of what you actually do as a graphic designer it might be hard to pull people over to your website or contact you. With a vague background in design I would definitely check you out, my girlfriend on the other hand who likes fairies and cake probably wouldn't bother with the info she gets from the card.
However, if people do check your details out you more than back yourself up with the work you've posted on your blog, especially your recent
valentine cards which are great!
Loving your work.
That is something I hadn't thought of, the business card typography was done in this way to fit it onto the card as tightly as I could. I will have a play around to see if i can improve it highlighting 'Crowe'.
As for the second point, I'm not sure how to convey what I do, this is what stumped me when first designing them. Apart from the bright colours I use in most of my work being shown in the cards.
Thanks again for the helpful criticisms!
My behance, I am working on getting a website going, Croweaboutit.com needs work:
http://www.behance.net/matthewcrowe