Critique this design please


Colligo

New Member
This is my first post on this forum so bare with me if I haven't used this well.

I'm creating a design for garments. The client wanted me to design a lazy looking sloth and wanted the brand name ' No Vacancies Club ' on there. He wanted me to accentuate the lazy life style in a Illustration. He wanted the style of drawing to be similar to the 'Ripndip' . I'm looking for ways to improve it and what you believe works well.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1xfKGzYWJqyDgI46Cp6V3xLwIwqmpRVQh/view?usp=drivesdk
 

scotty

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Welcome to the forum Colligo! :D

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Levi

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Welcome to the forum Colligo! :D

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I could see it...

I do find it a little strange that the OP has decided to take a photo of their screen with the image they want to show on the screen rather than just uploading a screenshot or saved file...
 

Wardy

Well-Known Member
Welcome Colligo.

I like the style, but is he looking lazy enough!? Club looks a bit detached at the bottom maybe, and 'lazy life' is a bit small,
same with the lettering on the t shirt - do you need that?
 

scotty

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Staff member
I can see it now. ;)

I like it although if I were being picky then I agree with Wardy in that he could look a little lazier.

I think adjusting the posture may help.

Maybe a little more slouched or make the line of action like a reversed S (slouched back and slightly bent knees)
 

HippySunshine

Senior Member
Agree with Wardys feedback. I'm also not feeling the writing on the tshirt, it doesn't quite work and you already have that text on the design.
I like your style though for sure. Good work :)
 
I think whatever you designed that is alright all the requirements are filled, for improving you can use the different type of fonts and color.
 
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