Yes I'm afraid I must agree...
Look - it's obvious you have a passion for design, and that's a good thing. But to make your work look more professional there are many many tips, tricks and rules to design that you'll find most of the members of this forum follow without even thinking about it - but that comes from experience.
Don't lose heart! Keep trying, fill your mind with the work and inspirations of others until it's ready to burst - and then try to figure out how these wonderful designs were achieved technically... if you struggle with that part, this may be a sign that you should enroll in some form of course to improve your technical ability?
Also - although I think your logo really needs to be rethought and restarted, if you want to create a really nice glow line effect I'd recommend the following technique:
1) Create a path in photoshop
2) Set your brush to a nice soft brush of desired pixel width
3) Stroke the path with "similated brush pressure"
4) Apply a layer effect and use a soft outer glow of matching colour
To be honest I don't think logos are the place for glowing line, but thought I'd give you a technique I've found useful incase you want to use it for something else!