Doesn't look too bad to me, but with type aligned top-left like that, I generally like the top margin to be at least equal to the left-hand margin and I'd prefer the date to be on one line (this will also improve the overall shape of the title).
The black type at the bottom stand out because it's a completely different face, and it's black, which doesn't feature anywhere else in the design. Try picking a hue from the actual image itself (a dark blue maybe?) and play around with the typeface.
