It's not a bad attempt by any means. It's difficult to get these sort of things right, because you need to adhere to reality for the most part and there's often a lot of work involved in that. For example, where you've got the ice vapour (what ever it's called) coming off the bow it looks a little odd, not to mention the colour of the violin, because there is no visible ice on the bow which would be required to make that happen. I think it just needs a bit more work to really achieve that slightly magical vision you're going for.